Thank you Elva. I'm glad you got some ricochets bouncing around. That's always fun. Speaking of fun, I had fun with this one. Well, I have fun with all but this one got a little out there. Really appreciate your comment!!
"...I have fun with all but this one got a little out there" I'd love it if you shared with all of us, fellow readers what moves the fun needle for you.
For me, it is fun when reading someone's words inspires surprising words in me. I brief (minutes) one-on-one conversation with my writing teacher sparks a story.
I did not know this: "The fourth wall is an imaginary wall that separates the story from the real world. This term comes from the theatre, where the three surrounding walls enclose the stage while an invisible “4th wall” is left out for the sake of the viewer."
(Retrieved on May 3, 2023 from Wikipedia, the Harvard Library of the Ethernet) I have more to say but I will save it for another day. (I am not familiar with SubStack protocols)
I have fun all the time, it seems. That is, I put work into what I write, but it's fun work. So maybe it's not work? I don't know. Must work be not fun? Some would say yes, but I've always enjoyed my work, whatever it has been. Well, except that time I worked in a brake factory for two months. :(
I guess I meant with this one that I went "out there" because I broke the 4th wall with the narrator. I've done it a couple of times before. It's a bit odd I suppose, but it just happened and I usually just go with what happens. I think that makes me a pantster.
I read this like an essay about the importance of breaking out of the cycles that life likes to pull us into. As I read it, I kept thinking about a news article I read earlier this morning about the U.S. Surgeon General’s new initiative to combat a loneliness epidemic. Anyway, your story-like-an-essay has inspired me to break out of my daily grind and do something different. I’m not sure what that different will be yet. I will report back.
Mike, I have never imagined you in a daily grind. It seems you must be traveling all over taking photos, making notes, sitting in coffee shops all over the place writing. Still, please let us know what that different will be. We're all interested and behind you. Go forth and report back...
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Love this one. I feel it. Excellent work.
Thank you Bill. I'm glad you liked it and appreciate your comment. Going to get me spoiled...:)
To say the story is brilliant would be a judgment
To say the protagonist now hides in the folds of my mind would be narcissistic
To say I have a good relationship with death would be a lie
To say I cherish the story more than death could be true
So instead, I will respectfully echo back the phrases that ricochet inside me
Life plus death equals existence
a bank account barely
watched it without watching
come home to the microwave
popcorn in their teeth
death is a living thing too
cuddled death under weathered tombstones
until the clock said bed
the final window that death crawls through
A sign read Psychiatrist. Close enough.
I’m not paying for that
Life didn’t have to have meaning
It only needed to be a little more cherished than death
Thank you Elva. I'm glad you got some ricochets bouncing around. That's always fun. Speaking of fun, I had fun with this one. Well, I have fun with all but this one got a little out there. Really appreciate your comment!!
"...I have fun with all but this one got a little out there" I'd love it if you shared with all of us, fellow readers what moves the fun needle for you.
For me, it is fun when reading someone's words inspires surprising words in me. I brief (minutes) one-on-one conversation with my writing teacher sparks a story.
Glad to hear you are having fun writing.
I did not know this: "The fourth wall is an imaginary wall that separates the story from the real world. This term comes from the theatre, where the three surrounding walls enclose the stage while an invisible “4th wall” is left out for the sake of the viewer."
(Retrieved on May 3, 2023 from Wikipedia, the Harvard Library of the Ethernet) I have more to say but I will save it for another day. (I am not familiar with SubStack protocols)
Substack protocols allow you to say whatever you like for however long you like, at least I think so :) I haven't been scolded by them yet....
Yes, the 4th wall. I just saw a movie the other night that did it in quite an unusual way. And with Willem Dafoe!
I have fun all the time, it seems. That is, I put work into what I write, but it's fun work. So maybe it's not work? I don't know. Must work be not fun? Some would say yes, but I've always enjoyed my work, whatever it has been. Well, except that time I worked in a brake factory for two months. :(
I guess I meant with this one that I went "out there" because I broke the 4th wall with the narrator. I've done it a couple of times before. It's a bit odd I suppose, but it just happened and I usually just go with what happens. I think that makes me a pantster.
Para mí escuchar o hablar sobre la vida y la muerte es divertido...en serio! Gracias, fue muy bueno leerlo y me gustó!!
Gracias Mónica! Ma da gusto que te gustó! En adelante leeremos con un café! Pero sin palomitas…:)
I read this like an essay about the importance of breaking out of the cycles that life likes to pull us into. As I read it, I kept thinking about a news article I read earlier this morning about the U.S. Surgeon General’s new initiative to combat a loneliness epidemic. Anyway, your story-like-an-essay has inspired me to break out of my daily grind and do something different. I’m not sure what that different will be yet. I will report back.
Thank you for the story, Victor. It has impact.
Mike, I have never imagined you in a daily grind. It seems you must be traveling all over taking photos, making notes, sitting in coffee shops all over the place writing. Still, please let us know what that different will be. We're all interested and behind you. Go forth and report back...
Thanks so much for reading and your comment!
Pray do tell
Stop the presses! Mike did something different!