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Jul 25Liked by Victor D. Sandiego

I'm glad you let this one out of his cage. He's an unpredictable beast of a story.

As usual, I read with admiration for the sentence structure, the imagery, the metaphor, the humor and the dead serious-message. Another thought-provoking jewel, Victor!

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Aug 1Liked by Victor D. Sandiego

I just read this and said to the no one in my room, “I don’t want to live on this planet any more." Such despair! I actually dripped one tear. But what gets me mostly are:

The contemporary truths:

“I’m unclear what we’ve done. Or if I’m guilty.” / “We don’t say what our eyes see.” / “TV: A slop trough of lies.”

And the bizarre lines that somehow fit: "Wife puts a napkin on our cat. “Stay,” she says." / "I can count birds."

And the odd grammar: "Let’s eat a corn." / "Reporters knock the door" / "They belong punished."

You have something to say, Victor, and Sharron is listening. A mí me parece un talento tremendo.

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This is a really potent piece of writing. I like how reasonable the narrator is throughout - rational, non-commitally curious, not belligerent at all, but closed off. I'm curious about the role of the wife as guide and chastiser - what does this say about femininity, insight, and understanding violation? I don't want to suggest that women are inherently kind - far from it - but what is it that women know? I was also very struck by the simile for the immigrant's stare, "like a bell boy without a tip", when the protagonist just goes ahead clumsily, fearlessly making his enquiries, oblivious to the analytic and emotional muscle of the man under scrutiny.

I hope it's not too tedious having the spell of your writing so clunkily (and possibly inaccurately) broken down. I really admire your poetic directness - it's very compelling and I always want to see my way back to the core ideas. Thanks for sharing this.

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Jul 25Liked by Victor D. Sandiego

Fantástica!!

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I admire your writing, Victor. 39 Boys on Ground should be here Friday. Looking forward to it! : )

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Jul 25Liked by Victor D. Sandiego

Jim, downstairs, , stole my thoughts and feelings!

I did manage to kept my big smile on my face. THAT no one can take away! Thank you!

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Jul 25Liked by Victor D. Sandiego

You have woven another amazing tapestry with this one, Victor. Setting it free was definitely the right call.

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Jul 25Liked by Victor D. Sandiego

The pleasure of your writs is all mine!

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