Learned a long time ago that people want to hear what they want to hear, not what you really think, so when my father asked me how I was doing, living on the edge of nineteen years under the sun, cut off from the world, unsung and alone, I told him fine, mentioned nothing of...
Darkly? You think? Absolutely bone-chilling, Victor. One of the scariest things I have ever read. That last long, long sentence is monumentally frightening. How you managed to get into that poor boy's head is beyond me. Yikes!
Another great example of choosing an item from the (growing, unfortunately) inventory of societal ills and putting a face to it, internalizing and manifesting it as a human story. Yes, it is dark - but what it reflects is dark, and real. We shouldn't close our eyes. Well done.
Holy shit, man, this is intense and amazing! Lyrical on the tongue, unique descriptions and analogies, and a sharp character study. Well done
Powerful stuff Victor.
"Redspread it's hot seed over the land." An unblinking look into a dangerous mind and red flags ignored because "people hear what they want to hear." You tackle the tough topics, Victor. Well done.
This is horrifying, and so extremely gripping. I think you lapped the rest of us on the isolation topic. Congrats.
I like your style. The lack of commas adds to the monotone of the monologue towards the end especially . Thanks for sharing.